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Teaser Tuesday: LOKI'S BOY

In honor of my being almost finished the second draft (no later than tomorrow, I'd estimate), here's a page from LOKI'S BOY, in which Leif takes a second look at Valhall and discovers it's not quite so glorious as he thought.

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Every impression he'd had the first time repeated itself. The spectacle of the golden walls and shielded ceiling, the mouth-watering smells that filled the air, the boisterous clamor of the assembled warriors. But Loki had said to look beyond the first glance. So Leif drew in a breath and stared hard through the smoke-hazed air.

Slowly, a prickle crept under his skin. When he eyed the walls long enough, he could see that patches of the gold were tarnished and dull, or scratched and dented. Some of the spears that formed the rafters were bent or snapped. Snatches of sky peeked from between the shields, where the roof needed patching.

Listening closely, he realized not all the shouts rising from the tables were in good humor. Here and there a man accused his neighbor of grabbing the best leg of meat, or of insulting his bravery, or of smiling to widely at the woman the other found lovely. Voices lifted in anger; insults were hurled beneath the merry din. Plates clattered to the floor as two here, and another two there, leapt up with swords drawn, until their fellows urged them back into peace.

Among them, other men shrank back, their faces withdrawn and sullen, their mouths twisted into frowns. And others still laughed too loud and too long, their cheeks ruddy with drink, while their companions turned away and muttered to one another. What had first seemed a picture of heroic unity was dissolving into friction and disharmony before Leif's eyes.

He lowered his gaze, taking in the remains that lay scattered by the warriors's feet: gnawed bones and congealing puddles of spilled wine. Beneath the smoke and the savory cooking smells a thread of something rotten reached his nose. His gut twisted. He stepped back, blinking, as if it might all reform into the image he'd once thought he'd seen.

Comments

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akabins
Nov. 11th, 2008 04:52 pm (UTC)
Intriguing. I look forward to see how it turns out. You're done the first draft, right?
megancrewe
Nov. 12th, 2008 01:25 am (UTC)
Yep, this is from the second (which is just about finished). Thanks!
jengt
Nov. 11th, 2008 05:04 pm (UTC)
Wow. How sad would it be to realize the beauty you once knew was a lie. Good descriptive prose.
megancrewe
Nov. 12th, 2008 01:25 am (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :)
rj_anderson
Nov. 11th, 2008 05:19 pm (UTC)
Very cool! A really vivid scene.
megancrewe
Nov. 12th, 2008 01:25 am (UTC)
Thanks! I am always worried about my more descriptive passages so I am particularly pleased when one seems to come out halfway decent. ;)
robinellen
Nov. 11th, 2008 05:32 pm (UTC)
Very nice...can't wait to read it all :) (I'm greedy, you know!)
megancrewe
Nov. 12th, 2008 01:26 am (UTC)
Soon, soon! :D
sboman
Nov. 11th, 2008 06:56 pm (UTC)
Cool Megan!
megancrewe
Nov. 12th, 2008 01:26 am (UTC)
Thanks!
sarah_prineas
Nov. 11th, 2008 11:59 pm (UTC)
Cool shift in perspective.

I can't wait to read this book!!
megancrewe
Nov. 12th, 2008 01:27 am (UTC)
Thanks! I can't wait for people to read it. :D
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