Log in

No account? Create an account

Previous Entry | Next Entry

A sneak peak at GIVE UP THE GHOST

It seems appropriate to do this today, since it is Teaser Tuesday. :)

I'm in the midst of picking out a couple of excerpts from GHOST to use in promotional materials and perhaps other places. And I need your help! In return, you get an early look inside the book. Deal?

First, I want a short teaser for where I don't have a lot of space. The lines I'm considering:

"I have friends. You just wouldn't believe they exist."

"The kids at Frazer Collegiate weren't laughing at me now. And I had enough dirt on all of them to make sure it stayed that way."

"The things people only do when they think they're alone, the secrets whispered between friends, all the dirt no one wants dug up: the dead see it and hear it. And if they find a breather with open ears, they're more than happy to tell all they know."

Second, I want a short-but-longer excerpt for where I have more space. I'm considering:

The last time I'd been followed, it was in grade eight, by a bunch of guys who thought it'd be funny to throw rocks at my legs and see if I could dodge them. Other girls, maybe, would have been flattered by Tim's determination. But this was me, and all I felt was freaked out.

"What are you doing here?" I said. "Are you stalking me or something?"

"What? No. I-- It’s--“ Tim cleared his throat and shrugged his shoulders back, seeming even taller as he did it. The sun behind him bleached his hair white. He stepped toward me.

"Look, I was skipping history," he said, "and I saw you leaving. That note--you got the note, right? I wanted to talk to you, and it looked like you weren't going to stick around. So I followed you."

Clearly our definitions of stalking differed.


I let out my breath. "As long as you're ready. She could have been the best mom ever and still have shot off to the next plane of existence without a second thought. They just do that."

Tim nodded, but his face shifted. The top part, around the eyes, started to sag, at the same time his mouth and jaw tensed up. That moment sealed the deal. I looked at him, and it was Paige all over again. Paige pulling that face four years ago, every time she'd screamed herself silly trying to get Mom to hear her. Paige making it this morning when she'd remembered Mom was away, again, as always.

Part of me said that Tim had no right to look that way, that lost. He had a dad, he had tons of friends, he had hope. If he had any clue what it was like, to really be left, the way Paige was, with no one but me and none of the people she wished she had...

But all of me knew that you couldn't fake that face. Not in a million years. Everything he'd said, he meant it.

"All right," I said. "I'm in. For now."


Dead people aren't in the habit of hiding. It's the opposite, really--they follow the living all over the place. I mean, think about it:

1. Usually no one can see them anyway.

2. They're bored out of their minds, and breathers are the only things remotely entertaining.

3. If someone can see them, they're so excited to finally have someone to talk to that you're lucky if you can get them to shut up, ever.


What I'd like to know is, which of these intrigues you the most, and makes you want to read the book?

Poll #1391287 The GHOST excerpt poll

Which of the short teasers most catches your interest?

"I have friends..."
"The kids at Frazer..."
"The things people only do..."
It depends (explain in comments)

Which of the longer excerpts most catches your interest?

"The last time I'd been followed..."
"I let out my breath..."
"Dead people aren't in the habit of hiding..."
It depends (explain in comments)

Thanks in advance!


( 8 comments — Leave a comment )
Apr. 28th, 2009 04:42 pm (UTC)
I'm so excited for this to officially be out :)
Apr. 29th, 2009 02:34 pm (UTC)
I am so excited for you to read it! :D
Apr. 29th, 2009 05:29 am (UTC)
This is fun! It turns out I voted with the majority!!
Apr. 29th, 2009 02:34 pm (UTC)
Yeah, people seem pretty agreed on the second set, anyway! Thanks for voting! :)
Apr. 29th, 2009 03:39 pm (UTC)
Yay...I have read it and I LOVED it!!!

Also, can you send me your addy at write4me at shaw.ca

I really must start recording addresses so I don't have to keep asking!!! I have ASH for your viewing pleasure
Apr. 30th, 2009 01:48 pm (UTC)
Yay, ASH! Will e-mail you at once!
Apr. 30th, 2009 09:18 am (UTC)
Er, hi. I may have followed you home from fangs_fur_fey. Well. Ok. I did. But I promise not to track dirt on the carpets.

I do offer unsolicited advice though. :D

For both sets I think it really, really depends on what you've got in correlation with the exerpts. Both the first tagline in the first set and the last paragraph in the second set (I have friends... and Dead people aren't in the habit....) are better at giving an idea of what the story is about if the reader has never even heard of the title. They're also funny, and give a succint representation of the novel's style.


If the book is darker (or you're giving out promo for an audience you know is oriented to darker themes) the third tagline (The things people only do...) gives a completely different impression of the themes and tone of the book. Both the first and third tagline appeal to me, but the middle one not-so-much, as there's no context for why the character wants to have dirt on the other kids (aside from the 'laughing', but the tone seems extreme in contrast to that alone) and without that context the MC (who I assume is speaking?) is a little alienating.

The only other caveat I have is that if you've got room for more than just the excerpt on your promo material, the second paragraph (I let out my breath...) is awesome. It probably would need a little bit of background context (oh, it's a high-school ghost novel, etc. etc.) to carry it, but I can say that for me whereas the the third paragraph let me know what the themes were and clocked the book as 'oh, I should get that if I see it', the second one gave me an emotional sucker-punch that said 'you WILL go order this NOW'. So. Um. Yeah.

And I will go away and stop playing with the statues on the mantelpiece now.
Apr. 30th, 2009 02:00 pm (UTC)
Heh, you are welcome to hang out here as long as you like. I'm not too much concerned about the state of my carpets. ;)

Very good points about tone and context! It's a hard thing to balance, finding a short bit that accurately represents the whole book. I will probably make up materials with different bits and choose which ones to use based on who's getting them.

And it is very nice to know that the second longer excerpt worked so well for you. :D
( 8 comments — Leave a comment )

My Books

Earth & Sky
(Earth & Sky #1, science fiction YA)
Skyscape/Razorbill Canada, 2014

The Clouded Sky
(Earth & Sky #2, science fiction YA)
Skyscape/Razorbill Canada, 2015

A Sky Unbroken
(Earth & Sky #3, science fiction YA)
Skyscape/Razorbill Canada, 2015

The Way We Fall
(Fallen World #1, apocalyptic YA)
Disney-Hyperion, 2012

The Lives We Lost
(Fallen World #2, apocalyptic YA)
Disney-Hyperion, 2013

The Worlds We Make
(Fallen World #3, apocalyptic YA)
Disney-Hyperion, 2014

Those Who Lived: Fallen World Stories
(Fallen World #3.5, apocalyptic YA)
self pubbed, 2014

Give Up the Ghost
(paranormal YA)
Henry Holt, 2009

Latest Month

May 2017
Powered by LiveJournal.com
Designed by Tiffany Chow